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*will be moving this to sketch account/scraps someday xD*
Well, no one probably knows who this is (well, maybe Heather knows, because she suggested the species)
But this is actually Lunaria, you know, the evilest dude in my fan fic? Ok, well since I haven't even written it, chances are you don't know him ^^; Well, here's basically a summary of him:
He's a demon that was born from the brinks of hell when hell was formed. He traveled around in a ghost-like black fog, and would posses any unsuspecting, innocent victim, and would make them indulge and/or partake in events that the host would never normally do (for example, if he possessed a nun, he would make her rape a little girl, or make an anorexic boy kill an important figure for a meal, ect) However, he was never satisfied with his hosts, and remained dormant for a few hundred years. After Flea and Krystal were born, he awoke because he was attracted to their pure light auras, but he couldn't do anything but posses their future children, because their spirits were too strong.
Kudos to you if you actually read that ^^; I was just kind of rambling off some ideas. But yeah, he got tired of moving from host to host, and actually wanted to settle down and have a mate, so he took over a noble unicorn teen. This is what the last stage looks like of a victim possesed by him, the eyes turn blood red, the fur ruffles and turns darker (sometimes red), claws and fangs grow, and bat-wings sprout from the body (however, since it's a unicorn, the wings are just broken and deformed with parts of the bat-wings hanging from the original wing), and also, markings form on parts of the body.

Ok, so that's great and all, but I'm stuck on the colors ._. I have no idea what colors to make him....erm suggestions anyone?

Critiques


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To put it bluntly, the angles of this illustration are skewed, as it looks as if he's facing both forward and sideways at the same time.

The forearms and torso of the character are WAY too long, giving him a lanky, drugged appearance. The character's eyes also seem to be different sizes than one another

The horn and ears are also crooked, and look quite awkward (unless this was done intentionally, to give the character a creepy vibe/feel, then it would be fine).

I'm PRETTY sure he wouldn't be able to fly in those wings. They look as if they were made out of paper mache and silly string.

The character, despite being the stereotypical "half good/bad appearance", does have some originality in it.

I hope this critique helped you - keep up the good work!
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He looks like a very cool character. Drawing wise, I think his chest is a bit big, and could be a tad bit narrower.
I also can't tell if his eyes are closed or not, or if he just doesn't have any eyes/pupils.

Design wise, I don't get why his pant leg is torn off so high. It looks really awkward, and would actually show his crotch :B
His arm that's going behind his back should either have those stitches shown or not. The other arm doesn't have them, and the one that does has them end abruptly.
His wings also wouldn't let him fly unless he has some skin in between them, like a bat's. Unless, he's not supposed to fly, which in that case, I have to ask why wings anyway?

For colors, I'd stay away from red/blood red as much as you can. Black and red on an evil character is a huge cliche and should be avoided like the plague. Stick with some colors people normally don't use, like puce green, shades of brown, and gray/purple mixes. He looks like a deceased character, so puce green is always good for the dead. A pale puce is always good for the skin, and not just a pure white (another cliche I think).

Good luck!
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Very nice and interesting, Krystal. I've never seen a possessed unicorn before, I think.

As the colors... Hmm... I would say that one part or side could be black and the other side could be a light or dark gray. I don't what else to add at the moment. ^^;

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:iconallhailkrystal:
Yeah, not only are there not very many unicorn characters, but I think mine is probably one of the first to be possessed ^^;

And I do want black on him, it's just getting every detail to look unique, ya know, not the steryotypical evil guy colors xD I'll keep the colors in mind, and it's ok xD Thanks!

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:heart:=FleatheHedgehog:heart: My bitch :devilish:

I know that walk. Some ass somewhere is about to be kicked!

Avatar by *KrystalOokamiInu, thank you very much :heart:
:iconshadow-the-echidna:
Most likely.

And you're welcome, even if I only mentioned two colors. ^^;

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:iconallhailkrystal:
No no, that's fine x3 I'll think about using gray xD

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:heart:=FleatheHedgehog:heart: My bitch :devilish:

I know that walk. Some ass somewhere is about to be kicked!

Avatar by *KrystalOokamiInu, thank you very much :heart:
:iconshadow-the-echidna:
Okay. x3

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Fighting Art Thieves for truth, honor, and ice cream! X3
:iconjaymazing:
I shall join you, oh creepy unicorn, wing guy!

I like the pic though. Good job, The Enforcer.

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I DUNNO WUT THIS IZ BUT AHM EATIN' IT!!1

If you wanna trade Wii codes for animal Crossing, Mario Kart, brawl, whatever send me a note and we'll work something out, wii will.
Corny jokes are corny.
:iconjaymazing:
I shall join you, oh creepy unicorn, wing guy!

I like the pic though. Good job, The Enforcer.

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I DUNNO WUT THIS IZ BUT AHM EATIN' IT!!1

If you wanna trade Wii codes for animal Crossing, Mario Kart, brawl, whatever send me a note and we'll work something out, wii will.
Corny jokes are corny.
:iconallhailkrystal:
Lunaria: oh, you will? *evil wickid grin*

Thanks x3 And lol, you used the nickname! Yay xD

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:heart:=FleatheHedgehog:heart: My bitch :devilish:

I know that walk. Some ass somewhere is about to be kicked!

Avatar by *KrystalOokamiInu, thank you very much :heart:

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